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December 1, 2021 at 2:15 pm
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wow. okay, so you pulled me in with the title. fat kid at heart here. and then you handed me every lesson i’ve ever learned about expectation. i need more time to sit with this, there’s a lot of gold in here. the best note i can give off the top is to get rid of this line, “I’ve always been scared of food poems” — remove that idea from the top of the poem. this is a food poem but it absolutely is not a food poem, and so much as you might have been scared to write one, you wrote the hell out of this.