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Lisa,

I love the directness and out of nowhere scene setting of the opening lines
This is so sad yet without sentimentality. Thank you
Lines that sing for me:

Fifty or more, grasping at grass
with their bills, tearing it free

I’m a better parent on sunny days

I envy them,

not for flight, but proximity

asking
to be picked up, just to be held

three feet closer. ( its such a small but needed ask… and, this makes me think of child coffins..)

Yesterday the trees
let go a thousand shades

The sweet smell of rot