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Radical neglect tattooed into my skin

I carry this skin for life

where the buses don’t run

Maybe there’s some different, more metaphoric ways to say things like, ‘Martyrdom, sacrifice, hateful, suffering, pain..’ that would make the victim journey more creative and thus prove the message of the poem?

I agree with Patrick – I’m here is punchier

Thank you