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Hey Sadie, thanks so much for sharing your work with us!

You’ve got a lot of lines in this that pack heat and some really cool internal rhymes that are fantastic. My only concern is that, especially in the first half of the poem it feels a little heavily idea based potentially without enough action to make it feel grounded. I think exploring ways to do that will perhaps bring a bit more universal appeal to this piece?