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Hey Sarah, thanks so much for sharing your work with us! I really appreciate the topic.

You’ve got a ton of really lovely lines in here.

The two things I find myself wondering about after reading this piece a few times now is whether it would help to make it a bit clearer that the fact that some are systematically privileged over others is the bad thing because, in some lines, it could potentially be read as sort of like, “Oh privilege is such a heavy burden!” but I don’t think that’s what you’re trying to communicate here. I also wonder if the language is a bit stiff at present. I know that it’s serious subject matter but speaking in a more stripped down way might make it more relatable? But, again, I love the work you’re doing here. Decolonisation can be painful but is so necessary!