Hey Jessica, thanks so much for sharing your work with us! I love a good list poem!
I think that one of the aspects of list poems that makes them really work is a mixture of very detailed specifics along with lots of general relatable things that can be fired off quickly. Personally I think you’ve nailed that second part but I wonder what this would look like with more of those detailed specifics in it. I also wonder about whether the message of the poem is fully clear other than just like, a shout out? This might be an excellent introduction to a poem or an amazing structure for a poem that just needs a few stanzas polka dotted throughout what you’ve got so far that unpack your intent a bit more?