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There are such good lines in here! I sat chuckling to myself in my dining room reading this!

Like:
because what I’ve always done
is backflip like a diver
splashing in for the reefs.
-I didn’t understand the line that came before this…and I think what you’re trying to say is probably pretty insightful but it didn’t connect for me.

What I prefer to do
is fuck all day and dance all night
-oh hellllll yeah

here we go

your lips, my thumb, cinnamon, green grass, frictions on warm skin
-I loved this part…I wonder if you did something like this multiple times at different parts in the poem to introduce different sections/ideas. I also just love a good list so maybe that’s just me.

The last 5 lines were great- glitter and word play and all!